The original sentence is mostly clear, but there are a couple of minor grammatical issues. Specifically, the question mark after "look" is incorrect since the sentence is a statement, not a question. The sentence can also be rephrased for clarity and flow. Here’s a revised version:
"Look at how puffed and swollen my eyes look in this picture. The day before I took this, I cried so much—I cried my eyes out. You won’t believe what made me