grammar check: Hi Team, I am writing to humbly ask for your approval on the Pass the Hat for our associate, Hedy Accatan, because her brother died. He was beaten up until he got into a coma and unfortunately, he didn't make it.
Your message is clear and conveys the necessary information, but I would recommend a few adjustments for clarity and tone. Here’s a revised version:
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Subject: Request for Approval: Pass the Hat for Hedy Accatan
Hi Team,
I am writing to humbly request your approval for a "Pass the Hat" initiative for our associate, Hedy Accatan, following the tragic passing of her brother. He was severely injured in an incident that left him in a coma, and unfortunately, he did not survive.
Thank you for considering this request.
Best regards,
[Your Name]
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Feel free to modify it further based on your tone and specific context!