The request for financial help is understandable, but it could be phrased more clearly and politely. Here’s a rephrased version:
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"Hi [Friend's Name], I hope you're doing well. I'm in a bit of a tight spot financially. I've been waiting for some money that I'm owed for the past two months, but unfortunately, it's been delayed, and the excuses keep piling up. I urgently need funds to pay my industrial training fee, which is almost due. If I